A.N This is the prologue and the beginning of chapter one of my new story "Trapped In Your Mind". It is about a small country, where when you get to 16 your memories are wiped. This is to hide something that is happening in the country (revealed later). You can choose one word to hang on to, most people choose their name – but some choose something else. This is the story of a boy – and the word that is all he can recall when he awakes in a cell. "Freedom".
I just re-read the prologue and it seems a bit cliched I guess, what do you think?
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PROLOGUE
The frigid night air made Jessica shiver as she stepped back from the window, staring straight up at the boy in front of her.
“Who are you?” she asked him, confused. A dark mask covered his face, and the fact that she couldn’t see who he was seemed to make his presence even more frightening.
He said nothing, and did not move even an centimetre in response.
She looked up at him, and with a feeling of dread, realised that he must be dangerous – otherwise how would he have got into the house? Maybe he had broken in and downstairs her parents were lying – no. She couldn’t think that.
"Who are you?" she repeated, trying not to panic. Her parents must have let him into the house, right. Listening, she could hear no sounds coming from downstairs, nor had she heard the door open. Panicking, she began to cry; somehow knowing that something dreadful was about to occur. The boy stepped back as if startled, as she began to sob. Slowly he lifted his mask,his hazel eyes fixed on her.
"Don’t be scared," he said in a gravelly voice.
"Don’t be scared?" She raised an eyebrow – of course she was scared!
"I don’t want to hurt you, you know. I have a job to do. An… arrangement with the leaders of our good city." He laughed joylessly, then continued.
"You see, there is something that happens to every child of Fila when they turn sixteen. I can only tell you this because I am sure that by tomorrow you will no longer remember what I am telling you. And you should know, I don’t usually let people know what will happen." He frowned and looked away.
"What will happen?" she asked softly, as if now resigned to what may happen.
"Every memory you have will be wiped from your mind. You will know all the skills you possess, to read or write – but you won’t know how you learned, or who taught you. You won’t remember your friends or your family. I don’t know why this happens."
Jessica leaned back against the wall. "No. You can’t be serious. Why would they do that?"
The boy looked at her with what could have been interpreted as sympathy. "Perhaps they want utter control, or there is something going on around here. Does it matter?"
Her expression changed to one of grim determination. "I don’t believe you, you’re lying. You have to be!"
"Have you ever heard your parents talk about their childhood? Your teachers, do they ever mention their days as a student?"
The boy did not give her a chance to respond, but instead glanced at his watch.
"Right, it’s time to go." From his pocket, he took a pair of handcuffs, and attached them to her wrists deftly. Jessica, usually a kind,gentle girl began to swear as she struggled to escape. He pushed her out of the room and down the stairs.
"I suppose you have your memories- must be why you help them, right?" she hissed.
"Yes actually, it is." His iron grip softened, as he led her out of the house and pushed her into the back of a black van. He climbed into the front seat, pulling his mask back down as he did so and then the car drove away, not to return.
CHAPTER ONE (PARTIAL)
They told me to write this, to make sure that I would remember how to. The thing is, I can’t say anything about me or who I am. Perhaps that’s just as well.
Maybe you’ll invent some story to explain your life before, where you were ordinary – or even better; some hero saving lives. You’ll never have to see the truth. That perhaps this place isn’t just somewhere you are trapped; but the place that reveals who you really are. And I am a monster, for what I did. I could have stopped it all, but I didn’t try hard enough.
As a comfort, in the cells, we whisper that it was all their fault – but I alone know the reality. Sure Fela may not be the best places in the world, but it has taught me something which I hope you can cling to. Something that will remain after my memories are wiped. Always watch your back; you never know who will betray you. For me, it was the person I trusted the most…